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Adrião Pereira da Cunha's avatar

What I love in this poem is how it feels like stepping into a memory you didn’t realise was still alive. The small details — the shoes, the grass, the red thread — bring back that strange mix of childhood freedom and quiet wonder. The moment the laughter appears is beautiful; it feels like something inside you loosening without warning. I like how the poem slows everything down, as if the air itself were giving you permission to feel more. The red thread pulling, the blue holding your gaze — it all feels symbolic in a way that doesn’t try too hard. There’s a warmth moving through the lines, the kind that comes from remembering a version of yourself you thought you’d outgrown. And that final smile feels soft, almost shy, but real. It’s a gentle piece that lingers long after you finish reading.

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thank you Adrião, for such a close reading.

The small details felt important to me, as they are the things I remember more often.

I alos love how you’ve followed the thread through the whole piece to the blue.

Thanks!

Petra's avatar

This feels like stepping into a memory you can almost touch. <3

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thank you Petra!

Maybe it's the magic of balloons 🎈 ✨️ 🎈

Petra's avatar

It must be! :)

Sarah Baker's avatar

Love the play between red and blue.

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thank you Sarah 😊

Christopher Van Name's avatar

This is what romance is all about. Lovely, Mark!

Sunshine's avatar

This poem softly weaves memory and feeling with gentle colors and quiet moments. Beautifully subtle and warm.

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thank you so much Sunshine ❤️

20th Century Fox's avatar

This is what life is really all about. Enjoying simple moments of beauty in nature. Or simple moments in general. Being able to see and cherish the specialness of everything.

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Yes it is! The simple things. Quiet times and just being outisde. We used to get so much joy from just that.

20th Century Fox's avatar

So beautiful

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thank you! ♥️

Aaliya's avatar

This is poetic eloquence at its best, I felt so nostalgic reading this ♥️

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thank you Aaliya! So glad you felt that tinge old something older in the piece! ♥️

MoTy's avatar

Reads like carefree summer in the fields, but the red thread pulls regardless x

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Ooooh, such a wonderful image and words, MoTy! Thank you 🎈 🎈 🎈

MoTy's avatar

You’re most welcome x

Linda Blatnik's avatar

my toes and lungs alike

are having a meeting with you on this. :)

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Ooooh linda!

I’m with you there, on the field, thread tied around our fingers, balloons in hand! ♥️

Linda Blatnik's avatar

looks like you need all my

senses and parts

present for this letting go ceremony. catching up with lungs and toes, then.

Linda Blatnik's avatar

🎈🎈🤸🎈🎈

Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

The softness in this stayed with me.

Especially the way the poem lets feeling arrive through small movements instead of explanation.

“something loosens in you” carries quietly through the whole piece.

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thankyou Antoni, especially for seeing the underlying message.

John Sheils's avatar

That transported me back to sunnier days. Beautiful poem

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Thank you John. Glad it worked!