That moment before the first touch. Maybe the most exquisite moment in a relationship. Thrill, fear, hesitation, anticipation, then the knowing. Your words made sure we were there with you. Beautiful!
Mark, "you stayed just past the moment you would have left" — that's the whole poem. You caught the second when everything is decided. Not before. Not after. Right there.
You caught it perfectly. I was trying to stay away from touch, as that draws us into the physical explanation, rather than the experience. Really pleased it worked!
Thank you for sharing @ChristYan Gerald!
Thank you for sharing @Firefly in the Forest 💛
You're very welcome, Mark. Beautiful poem. 💚🌿
so vivid and alive. this line “the river held its pace, slow, ” really stayed with me ✨
Thank you so much for sharing Diana 💛
Sometimes all you need is somebody to stand with you for the coldness to leave
Exactly that Elijah.
That moment before the first touch. Maybe the most exquisite moment in a relationship. Thrill, fear, hesitation, anticipation, then the knowing. Your words made sure we were there with you. Beautiful!
Thank you Christopher!
That moment is something special.
I love everything you’ve named there, especially anticipation.
Mark, "you stayed just past the moment you would have left" — that's the whole poem. You caught the second when everything is decided. Not before. Not after. Right there.
Thank you Lintara. You saw that exact moment, the hinge, and it’s something, maybe for me at least, I’ve experienced before.
Did the waters pull align with that something in us to wash away what could not hold breath and water, fire and water, wind and depth?
Amazing piece.
Thank you Syntax!
Such a beautiful extension and concept. Maybe take it into something new - love it!
No pressure though!
The atmosphere is wonderful! I love how it builds slowly through sensations; it's really immersive. 😊
Thank you so much Angela! I’m really pleased you felt its pull 🥰
Love your take on the feeling before first touch - more intense than touch itself. Not easy to capture. Beautifully written, Mark.
Thank you MoTy!
You caught it perfectly. I was trying to stay away from touch, as that draws us into the physical explanation, rather than the experience. Really pleased it worked!
It worked - you stayed clear of the heat. Painful restraint, Mark.
Thanks 💛
You are a poet ❤️
Thank you Be 💛